The story is very hard to follow. Part of this is intentional; Yun Shayi regains her memories partway through the first arc and furthermore actively acts in ways motivated by her complicated feelings towards Luo Tangtang from the hidden past, which naturally should inspire a struggle to follow her thinking. The later story also has Luo Tangtang being tossed though memories and illusions, and it makes sense to make the reader go through that with her. However, most of it is unintentional or detrimental. Scenes often feel skipped over in a fragmented way; too many things happen in transitions, and it's hard to tell what is supposed to be implied and what is supposed to be brought up later in retrospect. There is insufficient worldbuilding to properly ground the reader in the universe of the novel or in specific locations, and the reader is often just thrown into scenes without the minimum amount of scene-setting, making scenes feel confusing and fragmented.

Character motivation is the other major issue with the storytelling, and primarily what messed up the romance. Obviously some characters, such as Yun Shayi after regaining her memories, are supposed to be hard to follow. However, Luo Tangtang, as the perspective character, should not be as hard to follow as she is. Her thoughts and approach to the relationship shift in unpredictable ways. For example, Luo Tangtang thinking that Yun Shayi wouldn't like her was mixed in with her aggressively cozying up in an approach to be liked and also with retreating in a very disorganized way. Often, the reader needs to rely on guessing via out of story common tropes or straight up eventually being told what was going through her head, making for a dizzying experience.

In general the plot was incredibly hard to decipher; the broad strokes certainly can be understood, but certain moments just feel arbitrary and a decent amount of guessing with popular tropes has to be done to fill in some blanks or solidify some assumptions. The main god's motivations and actions are baffling. Luo Tangtang's actions in the memory/illusion were hard to understand; for example, it was never adequately explained what her goal was for pretending to have betrayed Yun Shayi. Vice-versa, because of how we follow along with Luo Tangtang's entry knowledge, it's also very hard to understand Luo Yi's actions. Most of them can be explained as her organically having fallen in love with Yun Shayi back then, but for example, the reason Luo Tangtang stopped Yun Shayi from approaching the fire was her pre-knowledge, which Yun Shayi wouldn't have had. Yet the events that set off the fake betrayal, whatever the reason, were portrayed as a consequence of her trying to change fate.

While the system concept was mostly explained and written in a way that is inseparable from the story concept, it still feels like the early story suffers too much from the existence of the system. Mostly the system just seems to vaguespeak, and with how fragmented the story is, it's unclear how pivotal of a role anything Luo Tangtang did during 'current' book time played, let alone the system. The most important role the system played was hypnotizing Luo Tangtang into liking Yun Shayi early on, which is... an interesting choice that hurt a lot of the early chemistry and potential interesting situations. Ironically this might be the most clear romantic moment in the book since at least it's spelled out.

Side arcs were treated terribly in this book. Many lingering plot points were simply abandoned; Luo Tangtang's identity as a White Tiger was meaningless, every single plot point set up in the early book was meaningless since it was a fake world, the black tentacle monster thing was meaningless unless that was related to the silk flower in which case that was underexplained, Luo Tangtang bringing Yun Shayi's body was meaningless unless that was intended to be a parallel to Yun Shayi being left with Luo Yi's body which had too little written about to be certain, etc. The Qilin side arc was especially pointless and a timewaster, as it had no real effect on the plot and only served to act as a "oh that's where it came from" later on. But even then, the silk flower served the exact same purpose while not taking up multiple chapters.